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So, is this a good idea, or does anyone have a better suggestion..? *(Story plotline)*?

PLOT LINE SO FAR: A girl is the daughter of a famous actress. Her father was her boyfriend from when she was young (seventeen, about) and before she went into the acting business (Bisuness? Buisiness? Buisness?) who left her when he found out she was pregnant. The media knows about her, but very little, being as she is hidden from the media inside her mother's house, taught by selected tutors. She's thirteen, give or take. She's quiet, but stubborn and quick minded. Also, she inherited her talent from her mother. She secretly sneaks out of the house when her studies are over, or when there is no schooling and everyone excpects her to entertain herself. Before, she alters her appearence by just a bit. She travels to places by bus or by walking, and takes on a whole new personality. She's the girl at the bookstore with the kentucky accent, looking for a book on cooking desserts to make for when her elderly aunt comes to visit, the girl at the petshop asking advice on her brother's new snake, just a random, unkown girl, completley different in every place she visits. Latley, she senses that somone has been following her. Anyways, one day she gets summoned to the police; she has no idea why. It turns out, a policeman had been confused at seeing the same girl two times, looking the same but behaving completley different. He just let this go. But, the third time this happened, he was sure it was the same girl, and that something odd was going on. He'd kept an eye on her, finding her usual spots and amused by this strange girl who became different people every place she went. He began watching her at long distance, watching how easily she became the other person and developed their false identity. Completley beleivable. He'd brought it up to his boss, and from that, it traveled to aimportant govermental figure, who'd been told by an.. agent, I should say. At the police station, the agent of that important person was there, explaining why she'd been summoned. Thy tell her that her acting talents and impersonation abitilities have been noticed, and they'd like to put them to good use. For the goverment, they say. It's too long to tell you the whole thing, but basiclly they want her to join a sort of... spy academy. She could help the goverment, they say, so talented that she is. Of course, she joins, looking for adventure. It's not like school, with all that junk, but the spy basics. It'll be only six months, I think. Then, They'll send her out on what they think is a simple, easy mission, which is sort of a 'traiing mission' because she's got to convince them that she's a boy and must gather as much information as she can. She's being sent to a all-boys boarding school for the mission. AS I said, just to gather information. However, the case is much more dangerous then anyone thought, and the girl gets deeply involved... So, should she ne the daughter of a famous actress, or if not, what would her parent's be (status, etc. etc, etc....) Thanks in advance!!!

Public Comments

1. It sounds interesting. But I wouldn't have the mother as a famous actress. It doesn't really seem important to the story. You could make the mother's occupation quite normal (or maybe she teaches at the school the girl goes undercover at?)
2. It's a good storyline but uneccesary to make her father her boyfriend and such. Make her life crap at home like her nanny is her tutor, her parents won't let her out of the house and such. That would be enough. If you keep out the father angle you would attract a bigger audience for the book because you won't gross so many people out. But otherwise a good idea, a new way to get into a government training program.
3. Lol, Mahkra. I think when she said "Her father was her boyfriend from when she was young" she meant that the girls father was the actress's "high-school sweetheart" if you will, not the girls father and boyfriend at the same time. And I think having the mother be an actress is great. With her being an actress, it leaves the girl alone a lot, the mother would be too busy shooting and such, premiers, parties, all of it. Also, it could be just as "scandalous" with a single actress being pregnant because of the fact that actresses are always in the spotlight. All around, like I said before, I think this is a great plot, great start, and can grow into a great story/book. :)