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Should I go along with this, or not...? (Something involved in my story plotline)?

PLOT LINE SO FAR: A girl is the daughter of a famous actress. Her father was her boyfriend from when she was young (seventeen, about) and before she went into the acting business (Bisuness? Buisiness? Buisness?) who left her when he found out she was pregnant. The media knows about her, but very little, being as she is hidden from the media inside her mother's house, taught by selected tutors. She's thirteen, give or take. She's quiet, but stubborn and quick minded. Also, she inherited her talent from her mother. She secretly sneaks out of the house when her studies are over, or when there is no schooling and everyone excpects her to entertain herself. Before, she alters her appearence by just a bit. She travels to places by bus or by walking, and takes on a whole new personality. She's the girl at the bookstore with the kentucky accent, looking for a book on cooking desserts to make for when her elderly aunt comes to visit, the girl at the petshop asking advice on her brother's new snake, just a random, unkown girl, completley different in every place she visits. Latley, she senses that somone has been following her. Anyways, one day she gets summoned to the police; she has no idea why. It turns out, a policeman had been confused at seeing the same girl two times, looking the same but behaving completley different. He just let this go. But, the third time this happened, he was sure it was the same girl, and that something odd was going on. He'd kept an eye on her, finding her usual spots and amused by this strange girl who became different people every place she went. He began watching her at long distance, watching how easily she became the other person and developed their false identity. Completley beleivable. He'd brought it up to his boss, and from that, it traveled to aimportant govermental figure, who'd been told by an.. agent, I should say. At the police station, the agent of that important person was there, explaining why she'd been summoned. Thy tell her that her acting talents and impersonation abitilities have been noticed, and they'd like to put them to good use. For the goverment, they say. It's too long to tell you the whole thing, but basiclly they want her to join a sort of... spy academy. She could help the goverment, they say, so talented that she is. Of course, she joins, looking for adventure. It's not like school, with all that junk, but the spy basics. It'll be only six months, I think. Then, They'll send her out on what they think is a simple, easy mission, which is sort of a 'traiing mission' because she's got to convince them that she's a boy and must gather as much information as she can. She's being sent to a all-boys boarding school for the mission. AS I said, just to gather information. However, the case is much more dangerous then anyone thought, and the girl gets deeply involved... So, should she ne the daughter of a famous actress, or if not, what would her parent's be (status, etc. etc, etc....) Thanks in advance!!!

Public Comments

1. actress sounds good, cause of her ability to, well, ACT. but maybe put in a prologue about a spy thing and maybe turn her dad into a spy too, though she doesn't know who he is or that he's a spy till when u decide.
2. make her parents prominent politicians with squeaky clean backgrounds; that way it'll be scandalour when everyone finds out who she is
3. No, don't change anything. I think your plot is great. Still, the reason why she's gets home-schooled is a bit weak. Get a stronger reason like, maybe the mother didn't want the public interfering and spoiling the daughter's life or something. it's even more fun when no one can recognise the girl, even though the mother is famous. Everything else is perfect. Just be careful about advertising your plot line like this in future.
4. All of it sounds good. Scratch that, great. This is definitely the most developed, full-of-potential plot I've read. I'm actually amazed at having read that, because I feel like I've just read the very first telling of a soon-to-be best seller. And I'm not kidding. I think this is a spectacular idea, and based on that plot overview, you'll write it well.